my writing

Here is my writing 

WALT develop a story to entertain the reader- Sage

Text form: Narrative

Success Criteria

• Use the Writing Process (Get Ready, Craft, Revising, Editing, Sharing)
• Structure your narrative through your plan
• Begins with orientation (setting and main character)
• Paint a picture with words (descriptive words and actions)
• Paragraphs (Orientation / Events x3 / Resolution - Ending)
• My writing goal:

Dancing with the sky

A long long long time ago there lived a little girl named Crystal. She had a brother named diamond. they are twins they but do not look the same. They lived in a small cottage in the forest, the cottage was covered in plants and vines. But nearby there a evil lady, no one new what she was called so they just called her mystery of evil that is.

“ No no no. How many times do I have to tell you, I will do it myself ” yelled mystery of evil her name cat “just live me alone” she carried on. Not to long after she set off to find the twins she fined them at the playground.

Cat was about to attack when suddenly the sky pick up Crystal and started dancing  so did Crystal. Not so long after the sky pick up diamond when the same thing happened all over again.

Now and then they go dancing with the sky.            

free choice writing.

Hi guys today I am bogging my free choice writing with you because I am proud of it and it my personal best it took me a long time because I wanted it to be my best so it can move me up a level in writing. 
Here is my free choice writing and the criteria.  
Free Choice Writing- Sage

Persuade, Entertain or Inform?

I am learning to communicate my ideas effectively to the reader.

You choose the topic and you choose the writing purpose. This needs to be your best independent writing for assessment. Below is the success criteria for quality writing. Use this criteria and go for it!

Success Criteria (Sentence formation has been our main focus)
Content & Ideas	Include a range of ideas with clear details.
Sentence Formation	Include simple, compound and complex sentences Start most of my sentences with different words
Vocabulary	Choose words and language features to meet my purpose.
Structure	Clear beginning, middle and end with paragraphs.
Spelling	My best spelling with good attempts at words I don’t know.
Punctuation	Use all basic punctuation (capital letters, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks) correctly and attempt some complex punctuation.

Sweet sweet treats

Sweet candy facts.

Candy is sweet because of the sugar inside of the candy there is lots and lots of sugar that is way it is so so sweet and most people like candy just because it taste nice and is sweet. The people who like candy most is kids because it is really really taste nice and is sweet.       

Sour candy facts.

Some candy is sour like topstick wats it is a really really sour candy but if you like sour stuff like I do it should be nice and then there is sweet sour candy like sour patch kids by that I mean it is sour and sweet at the same time. My favorite sour candy is sour patch kids what one is yous?

Sweet and sour facts that they share.    

Sweet and sour candy have fat in them and sugar in and some have it on them as will as in them that is what makes the candy yummy and sweet. But on candy is heavy.           

  

iProud 1

I am blogging this because it is my personal best and I am proud of it.  

My Best Learning

This is my camp letter .

Sue

Hastings

Dear Sue,

Thank you so much for taking time off work and away from your family thank you for being on the river walk with us. I appreciate it.

It was fun on the river walk with you. I like how you helped us when we needed it especially in the strong current. I liked how you kept on encouraging us to move when the river got tough. My favorite part of the river walk was being able to float. Thank you for helping us on the river walk.  

My favorite time with you was when you helped us through the strong current it was hard to keep my balance and still fun. My favorite part of camp was playing spotlight because it was fun but scary when the finder would came to look. My favorite activity was the pool making because it was fun and I enjoyed it so so much when I got wet.  

Yours sincerely,

From Sage

I am proud of this because I took my time and it is better than I expected.  

My biggest challenge was selling my words creatively.

My Persuasive Speech!

Goal Use commas, questions marks, full stops, capital letters and exclamation marks independently.

Trees should not be cut down because there will be no more fruit, it will be bad for some animals habitat, cutting down trees is bad for the environment. I hope you enjoy my speech.

Trees should not be cut down because there  will be no bananas bright and yellow, apples as red roses, pears most delicious so trees  should not be cut down at all. When people get sick they like to make a lemon drink to help them feel better  but if the trees are cut down they can not and they will only feel worse.

Trees should not be cut down because it will be Bad for some of the animals  habitat’s like Monkey's homes and Birds homes. So trees should not be cut down. It could be bad for some native Animal like kiwi because then they can not hide from Animals that like to eat it. Trees should not be cut down.  

My last reason why trees shouldn’t be cut down is it is bad for the air.  Cutting down trees could be good use for paper and staff but not for the environment  in fact it is not good for   environment at all so trees should  not be cut down at all.  It also will lower the amount of oxygen that will affect people’s breathing. It will affect people’s breathing if  there less of it because it helps as breath.   

Now I have persuaded you that trees should not be cut down with the 3 reasons. The 3 reasons were, there will be no more fruit, bad for the animals and bad for the air. I hope you enjoyed my speech.  

Thank you for reading. I hope this persuaded you.